Thursday, May 3, 2012

Dust It Off Bloghop--The Pitch

First off, my query is getting critiqued (hacked to death) by the lovely ladies of Falling For Fiction today. So head over there, take a look, and feel free to add to the comments. I can use all the help I can get.

Now, onto the bloghop:


Welcome to day one of the Dust It Off Bloghop, in which I post a 1-2 sentence pitch for a currently shelved manuscript. I've chosen to use my 2011 NaNo that I haven't looked at it since typing the words The End. Feel free to leave a comment and visit the link above to see what others are dusting off to share with the world this week.

Title: KOA'S PASSAGE

Genre: MG Fantasy Adventure

Word Count: 54,000

Pitch: Death Marchers have taken his grandfather, and it's all Koa's fault. He must find Hina, goddess of the moon, and make her tell him the Marchers' deadly secret, because without it, his grandfather will be gone--this time, forever.

22 comments:

Kyra Lennon said...

Love this! It gave me a little shiver!

Cortney Pearson said...

How fun, I'm glad you're pulling this out again for us! Sounds like an intriguing premise! I'm curious about the Death Marchers' secret!

Suzi said...

Sounds a little scary--I like it.

Charity Bradford said...

Whoa! Sounds chilling and full of adventure.

Danielle B. said...

Sounds so good! I'm glad you dusted this off. It made me want to read more. NOW!

Morgan said...

Ooooo... I do like this... I definitely get a feel for the story through the pitch. Nice. :D

ilima said...

Kyra-shiver is good!

Cortney-Thanks for the fun blog hop!

Suzi-Don't worry. It's MG, so it won't be too scary. :)

Charity-It is! Thanks for stopping by.

Danielle-It's getting me excited again, too.

Morgan-That's good to hear!

Laura said...

Thats sounds fantastic! So much better than my 2011 NaNo turned out lol. I hope you get a chance to pick it back up again.

Tracey J said...

Great pitch. I love that it's MG because I love dark MG.

Shiela Calderón Blankemeier said...

I love this! MG needs more of it - dark, multicultural, awasome. I hope you return to it and finsih. Looking forward to your excerpt.

Rachel Schieffelbein said...

Ooh, this sounds good! Why did you shelve it?

Christine Rains said...

What a wonderful and ominous premise. I look forward to see more about it during the bloghop.

Avery Marsh said...

Not only does the premise sound cool, but the world seems like a place I'd want to explore. You perfectly captured what makes your story stand out.

Juliana Haygert said...

Love your pitch! It sounds like a great story!

E. Arroyo said...

Hooked. Love that last sentence. Nice.

Andrea said...

Death Marchers and Goddess of the Moon sound very intriguing! I love the pitch :)

Giora said...

There is a shortage of MG books for boys, so all is good here. Instead of sending Koa alone to his journey, you might want him to go with his best friend (boy) or with his best friends (boy and a girl) to also have a story line of middle graders' friendship. Good lcuk!

Kelley Lynn said...

Thanks for letting us take a stab at your query today. :)

This MG sounds VERY good. And since I know you're a fantastic writer, I'm sure its well written too :)

Theresa said...

I have such a soft spot in my heart for grandparents. Every story I write seems to have one popping up in it whether planned or not.

I love the high stakes and this totally piqued my interest. Can't wait to read your excerpt.

Rena said...

This sounds great. I'm looking forward to seeing more of this project!

Jaycee DeLorenzo said...

Great pitch! Am eager to see your snippet!

ilima said...

Laura-I do too!

Tracey-I'm glad.

Shiela-I'm sure I will someday.

Rachel-I honestly think it has a lot of potential, but it's my first MG and maybe my only because I REALLY missed writing some semblance of romance. haha.

Christine-Thanks for popping by.

Avery-Thanks!

Juliana-thanks. pitches are so hard!

E.Arroyo-save grandfather!

Andrea-They are pretty cool.

Giora-He has a friendly owl companion. :)

Kelley-Thanks for the query help. You know I REALLY appreciate it.

Theresa-Poor Grandfather :(

Rena-Thanks.

Jaycee-That will be a fun day to hop around for sure.